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The Process

In this page the process I followed to complete my essay will be shown. The beginning stages of my outline, thesis and draft will be discussed. The changes that were done in order to improve them will be shown. Also how the curse objective helped me do that and improve my writing skills. 

Planning and Exploratory Writing 

  • This was a video on social construction by Lisa Wade and Gwen Sharp from week 1.

  • The objective focused on was Develop habits for engaged reading, because this video helped me engaged to understand what social construction is.

  • I used this in my essay because I discuss how social constructions for genders are portrayed in Disney films.

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Social Construction Video Exploratory Assignment

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Killing Us Softly 4 Annotation

  • This was an annotation from Killing Us Softly 4 by Jean Kilbourne.

  • The objective focused on was Apply these reading skills to various kinds of texts, due to this being a video and my first time annotating a video form. 

  • In my essay I reference Kilbourne's video, which has helped me develop the idea of how Disney affects people's perspectives. 

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Peer Review

  • I chose this because it helped me with my thesis, which I believe makes or breaks my essay.

  • I felt it guided me in the correct direction to state my essay more precisely. 

  • The objective focused on is Understand the importance of peer review to your own reading and writing, because it is important to take in people suggestions to improve one's work. 

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Best Advice Received

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Best Advice Given

  • This was my suggestion about a thesis. I felt it was the best because I saw that having a strong and clear thesis would improve the overall essay.

  • Having an easy flow in the main idea would make it easier for their readers to understand their main ideas.

  • The objective focused on is Improve your peer review skills through practice, because being able to provide feedback to classmates made me more comfortable in expressing my thoughts as a reader to help them.

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Self-Review

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  • This annotation focuses on my citations.

  • I need to improve them by adding the authors names and time stamps.

  • In some I cited well but there were a couple I left lacking information.

  • There were details lacking in some examples.

  • They were too vague and need to be more detailed to support my essay.

  • I need to conjoin sentences and add descriptive details. 

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The Self-Review objective was focused on because it required me to look at my own work find errors to change to improve my essay. This is an important objective because it allows the writer to take a closer look on their own mistakes and fix them. 

Revision

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The left image was my topic sentence for my intro paragraph. It did not have the correct words, so I edited to be more accurate like Professor Haas suggested. I think it make my essay better because now it portrays the meaning I had in mind in the correct way. 

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The left image was my first thesis I had made. It lacked clarity and was not as specific as it is now. I specified what fairytales I would discuss. This made it more clear for the reader to know what the essay will discuss. 

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